The Case study needs some revision. The MP3 file is feedback from the professer

The Case study needs some revision. The MP3 file is feedback from the professer indicating what I need to fix in my case study and a sample case study. Notes are also included in the word document. Below are the instructions for the case study: 
Step 1: Submission (earn up to 100% of the possible points for the assignment)
Your submission should include all of the following components:
Content
Describe a “real life” instance of your selected social issue in a professional or a personal setting.
Discuss your perspective on your selected social issue, including the reasons for your viewpoint.
Discuss how your core values inform or influence your perspective on your selected social issue.
Demonstrate that you are really thinking about your issue—don’t settle for easy answers, don’t pretend that conflicting evidence doesn’t exist, and don’t feel that you have to take an either-or position.
Discuss the complexities of your selected social issue. For example, do not just conclude that using academic language is always good, or that government surveillance is always bad, or that wealth automatically leads to health. Think about the intricacies of these issues and how they play out in everyday life.
Organization
Include an introductory paragraph, where you clearly outline a “real-life” instance of your social issue and you give a thesis statement that indicates your perspective (see Part 2: Writing Your Introduction for an example).
Include 3-5 body paragraphs where you include details, examples, and quotes from at least three of the course readings and two additional readings to help you develop and support your key points (see Part 3: Writing Your Body Paragraphs for an example). 
Include one body paragraph where you discuss how your core values inform or influence your perspective on your selected social issue (see Part 3: Writing Your Body Paragraphs for an example).
End your essay with a concluding paragraph where you restate your thesis, summarize your key points, and leave the reader with the “so what?” ( see Part 4: Writing Your Conclusion for an example).
Which areas of feedback did you choose to address in your revised version and why?
How did you address this feedback in your revised version? 
Which areas of feedback did you choose not to address in your revised version and why?
What writing challenges discussed in the Grammar Lab typically give you trouble? Did you find any in your draft that you have corrected?